In Romeo and Julie, Shakespeare illustrates the development that occurs during adolescents and coming of age through Juliet’s transformation from a passive and uncertain adolescent to a courageous and passionate woman. When Juliet is first introduced, she is confronted by her mother, Lady Capulet, with the idea of a marriage proposal from Paris. In response to her mother and the nurse, Juliet portrays a polite and submissive daughter who will "look to like" (I. iii.97) but is primarily concerned with her parents (parents' = plural possessive) consent and their will for her. When Juliet meets Romeo, she begins her transformation into maturity which is apparent from the balcony scene. As Juliet contemplates the significance of Romeo’s name and family while standing on her balcony, she boldly states "Deny thy father and refuse thy name" (II. ii. 34). Juliet’s thoughts of defiance indicates (# confusion:  plural subject takes plural verb) that she has been exposed to love and the complications that love often entails, but Juliet progresses into the realm of maturity by declaring her own will.

Through the events of the play that produce the course of Juliet’s coming of age, Juliet develops into the most courageous of the play’s characters. After Romeo’s banishment to Mantua, Juliet proves herself to be both courageous and innocent in spirit as she confronts her present situation and accepts the Friar’s plan to have her take an elixir that would produce "a thing like death" (IV. i. 74). Juliet’s response to the Friar’s proposition indicates a strong sense of determination while maintaining a youthful idealism and innocence as she relates to the Friar that "Things that, to hear them told, have made me tremble—and I will do it without fear or doubt, to live an unstained wife to my sweet love" (IV. i. 86-89). Juliet’s fearlessly confronts her situation in facing the possibility of death, but she also illustrates that she still holds a sense of innocence through her concern for her love and her desire to remain pure for her husband by not marrying Paris. Although Juliet demonstrates a successful coming of age through her development into a courageous and passionate woman, she ultimately falls victim to the conflicts of the world. The rationalization behind the tragic end of Juliet’s life is uncertain, but Shakespeare leads his audience to the conclusion that ultimately fate lead "a pair of star-crossed lovers [to] take their life" (Prologue, 6).
This is a solid response, especially your focus on how J maintains her courage and innocence in the face of a corrupt and deadly social world.  The writing is a bit sloppy, and needs more precision, but overall your good ideas are coming across.  8.5